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[Marina]

LIQUID LIGHT

Liquid light
shining,
burning bright
on
a summer's day,
dreams
come my way
floating
on an ocean wave,

carressed,
in moonlight bathed,

remembered
secret delight,
sending
shivers of light
flashing,
into my spirit

branded,
eternally with

deep
sensual passion

[bikerbrom]

Nice one, I like all of it, apart from the word 'explicit' at the end,
maybe end it:

branded
eternally with deep
sensual
passion!

[Marina]

slight modifications going on, here is my new ending!

[bikerbrom]

slight modifications going on, here is my new ending!

Looks good to me!

[Marina]

LIQUID LIGHT

Liquid light
shining,
burning bright
on
a summer's day,
dreams
come my way
floating
on an ocean wave,

carressed,
in moonlight bathed,

remembered
secret delight,
sending
shivers of light
flashing,
into my spirit

branded,
eternally with

deep
sensual passion.